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Subject: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/1/2012, 5:26 pm
Bulldog Is seen working out while his Entrance Theme is playing in the background.
British Bulldog: My name is The British Bulldog Davey Boy Smith. I am a World Class talent who is finally making my way to the WCW. Who will be my first opponent? It matters not. Who will be my first Target? The first unlucky person that stands in my way of attaining my goals. That is Complete domination of this Company. I dare anybody to try to stop me! Resistance is futile!
OOC: Haven't done this in awhile the Promo is alittle shaky. I am open for constructive criticism. Anything that helps me get better. Thank you. Also feel free for anyone to jump in.
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Tyler Member
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Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/1/2012, 5:37 pm
Make it better known your guy is talking!
-British Bulldog- Blah blah
British Bulldog: blah blah
:British Bulldog: Blah blah
Heath Slater wCw Assistant GM
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Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/1/2012, 7:47 pm
OOC: Great first start! I recommend watching tons of promos for the superstar you pick, in this case it's Bulldog. That way you can get a feel for how he talks, the common words he uses, and the gestures and poses he makes. Does he usually promo backstage in an old school interview style, or does he walk to the ring and talk in front of the crowd? You're basically converting a video promo into text, so try to be descriptive as possible.
Good grammar and formatting. If you didn't already, I recommend typing your whole promo in Microsoft Word or a word processor with spell check then pasting it into the site and then formatting, color coding, and adding pictures/videos to it.
I'm new at this stuff myself, but those are things that I found helpful.
Guest Guest
Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/1/2012, 8:14 pm
... I was about to post helpful hints.......
Then I read what Critic said. Perfect wording.
Slater just earned himself a staff position as Promo Advisor. I will be sending all newcomers to Critic for pointers.
Thanks , man.
Jay
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Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/2/2012, 3:04 pm
Before I grade this I would like to know if you are waiting a response from somebody to start a feud.
The Sinister Effect Member
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Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/3/2012, 12:43 am
Well..I wasn't sure at first. However, might as well grade it because i don't see it as Feud Material just yet.
Edge General Manager
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Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/3/2012, 12:46 am
Sure thing I'll do it tomorrow I'm in bed right now
Guest Guest
Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/3/2012, 4:28 am
... Bulldog won't be competing until Age 2.
His promos are intros (think videos on the Titantron).
They are not open for replies.
Jay
Edge General Manager
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Subject: Re: The Bulldog is coming.. 10/3/2012, 1:42 pm
{Official Grade}
Bulldog: Seeing as this is your first promo, I will give you 2sp. I would like a lot more content from you the next time you post a promo. I am being a little lenient as this is your first promo. Look at some other promos that may help you to becoming a 5sp promo writer.
I recommend watching tons of promos for the superstar you pick, in this case it's Bulldog. That way you can get a feel for how he talks, the common words he uses, and the gestures and poses he makes. Does he usually promo backstage in an old school interview style, or does he walk to the ring and talk in front of the crowd? You're basically converting a video promo into text, so try to be descriptive as possible.
